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Her body going lifeless in his hands. Blood dripping form his mouth, his thrist satisifated from another day of feasting. A sharp pain hit his stomach, and he fell to his knees dropping the body in front of him. They were coming after him, if they caught him he would be killed. Fear rushed over his body and paralyized him from moving.
He made himself get up and move, wiped the blood from his mouth and tried to ingnore the fear going through him. The pain in his stomach hit him harder. "MY stupid thrist is still not satisiated fight but i will have to dirnk another day" he whispered to himself as the pain got sharper.
He licked his lips to rid them of the blood that was now satined on them. He grabbed his waist and headed down the alley he was in. He hopped a fence and felt his shirt get caught on the fance and torn a whole the side. Forget the shirt my life is on the line! he reminded himself as his body tried to go back for it. Fear rushed over him agian.
As he reached the end of the alley he saw the darkness come to a end, and fear was gone, he was now terrified. The sun. It would burn the skin right off his bones. He started to hear footsteps comign fast. He cussed under his breath. He was between a rock and a hard spot. His own clan was coming after him, he had drank from human and his own kind.
"Vladimir bones, stop where you are you are going back to the hide out for excuetion, the moment you are taken to the hide out and the death room. Now don't move!" a voice commanded
"I will fight for my live right here if i have too! You should know that Logan!" Vladimir shouted back at Logan.
"Than we will have to fight you, but remember it is one agianst five the odds are in our favor"
Five figures appeared in front of him and he felt the first beat of sweat betray him, and he let it show his fear. His blood started to boil with anger as he remembered that is was Logan who changed him because he was dying, when he wanted to die. Logan,Morgan,Tod,Sam,and drake he named every vampire that stood before him. The first one can at him. Sam.
He came at Vladimir with full force, and Vladimir returned it two times as hard. Vladimir grabbed his dagger and got a clear shot of Sams lung, and laughed when Sam started to spit up blood and dropped to the floor half dead. "Who's next!" Vladimir challenged pulling out a second knife.
"Vladimir stop this! Just take the death and leave it at that" Logan tried to reason.
"Never!" Vladimir repsoned with a smirk
Two came into fight, Drake and Tod, they were more skillful. THey circled around vladimir trying to confuse him, more sweat ran down vladimir's face as he moved his eyes form Drake to Tod. They attacked. Tod slashed the left side of Vladimir's face making blood gush from the side of his face. Vladimir striked Tod back with the same fatal move that had killed Sam. Drake came from behind and stabbed Vladimirs right shoulder blade. Vladimir twirled and elbowed Drake in the stomach making him stumble backwards.
Quickly, Vladimir took out a knife and threw it at drake without aiming, and striked him in the middle of his forehead. A luckly shot. But his luck was running out and more sweat started to betray him, and mixed with the blood running down his face. "Only two left is that all you brought?" Vladimir huffed out of his breath.
"Please Vladimir stop this and just come with us!" Logan begged
"Its useless why should i go if i am just going to be killed!"
Somthing stabbed him the side, and he looked beside Logan, Morgan was gone. He turned his head slowly and saw Morgan's face staring at him with a devlish smile. Vladimir wanted to see Morgan's eyes but they were covered by his shadow black hair. "You were going to die either way" Morgan whispered in Vladimir's ear.
"That's what you think, my old friend" Vladimir replied
"What are you-" that was all Morgan got out before a spike ripped through the skin of his throat, making blood pump and his head detach from his body. His body dropped to the floor lifeless like the rest of his comrades had fallen before him.
Logan stared at Vladimir, no a monsterhe thought. he stumbled backwards moving his black hair out of his face to see if it was true of what he saw. Did his twin brother relaly fall into deaths hands? He saw Morgan's lifeless body, the bloody O of his twin brother's neck. A tear trickled down his cheek, and he bit into his bottom lip. He looked at Vladimir one more time, to see him for the monster he was. Five spikes stuck out of his back, and his fingermails were at least a foot long and black, but every one was as sharp as a wodden stake.
His teeth were shark tooth sharp. His eyes were the most memorizing, the left one was purple and the right one was red. Logan raised his two daggers defenivly. "This is for Morgan!" he roared at he charged for the monster, that was once his student Vladimir.
Blood poured our of his mouth as Vladimirs nails stuck through his stomach and back. Memories came rushing into Logan's head. Memories of Vladimir and him training, the laughs they had. The deaths they had seen togther and lived through. THan the day VLadimir left and turned into this. More tears trickled down his face, and sadness rushed over him like a blanket.
His vision went black and he breathed his last breath, and the last tear feel from his body like his spirit did. Vladimir let the lifeless body of m mentor fall. He started to chuckle. A puddle of blood formed around him. THe chuckles turned into a evil laugh. He started walkign toward the ed of the alley forgetting that the sun was up.
He step out of the alley and felt a rush of heat hit his body. His skin started to bubble and burn away. "No! No! No' he sarted to cry in pain.
His cry became a scream, and his body bursted into flames turning to ash. He saw the spirits of Sam,Tod,Morgan,Drake, and Logan. He tried to get closer to them but they moved away from him and started to fade. He looked at his hand and felt tears start to fall. They weren't fading. He was.
- by Goldenthyrsus |
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- | Submitted on 07/16/2008 |
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- Title: The bloody truth
- Artist: Goldenthyrsus
- Description: another warm up, and just tell me if it is good or bad plz dont say anything really mean
- Date: 07/16/2008
- Tags: vampire monster fight blood
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Comments (5 Comments)
- quinlynnes - 01/25/2009
- There is a couple of grammar errors, but the story is pretty good, it builds up quickly and leaves you wondering at the end.
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- Captain fire drake - 01/21/2009
- completely awesome. some spelling errors though.
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- fire_lord1011 - 07/17/2008
- this is really good
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- unknownartist - 07/17/2008
- i realy like this keap it up
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- Borogarl - 07/16/2008
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The pace on this was great. Too many writers can't get that. I do alot of the same things in my writing, like the dramatic 2 word sentence... "The sun." lol - it was great seeing that. Overall I enjoyed it. Watch out for repetition, like:
"You should know that Logan!" Vladimir shouted at Logan."
We know it's directed at Logan, so it would read smoother as simply... "You should know that Logan" Vladimir shouted.
All in a great piece. Keep writing! - Report As Spam