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"Ugh.... why is it my job?" Flame replies. "Hey, I'm not going to." says Crystal. "Well if the elders want to go make sure everything’s in balance in the human world, why don't they just go?" snaps Flame. "First off, I'm not going 2 go do it. Second off, they say it will be good for you" crystal replies sarcastically. "Oh yes, the queen of Glacious has to go make sure the human world is in balance while the queen of Cycleir stays in this realm" Flame says grumpily. "Look at it this way you have your fire and storm powers, if anyone makes you mad u burn them" Crystal states while laughing. "Well at least while I'm gone could you practice your ice and wind power?" ask Flame. "Yea, yea, yea just hurry up into the human world" snaps Crystal. "Fine" replies Flame. Opens portal. "Later" says Flame. Jumps into portal.
Flame jumps out of portal. "Hope they got the portal right this time. Let's see, trees, water, sky, humans, yep this is the human world." states Flame. Climbs up into tree. "Everything’s looks in order, I guess I'll just take a nap then I'll be heading back" says Flame tiredly. Yawns, and then falls asleep.
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"Hey you! up in the tree!" says some guy. "huh?" says Flame while waking up. Begins to fall off tree. "AAHHHH!!!" shrieks Flame. Guy catches Flame then stands her up. "What were you doing in that tree? says the guy. "Oh, I was making sure the human wor- I mean... napping!" says Flame quickly. "Not the best place to sleep. Hi, I'm Mitchi." says the guy. "Hi, I'm Flame." says Flame. "Cool, hey if you're not too busy napping, you wanna come to a party with me? It's a bonfire." asks Mitchi. "Sure why not." replies Flame happily. "Awesome, come on!" says Mitchi. Mitchi leads them to the party.
At the party, Mitchi starts dancing to the music in his weird but hilarious little way. "Lol, you are a really cool dancer, where did you learn how to dance like that?" Flame questions. "From monkeys, all I had to do was feed them bananas." Everyone burst out laughing. "Oh, no! What time is it?" Flame asks worried. "It’s only 11:00 p.m. why?" says Mitchi. "Umm I have to go. I'm sorry. Later!" Flame quickly says. "Ok, Later!" Says Mitchi. Flame runs around an old building, opens a portal, and jumps through.
Flame comes in and sees Crystal staring right at her. “SO, what took you so long?!?!?” said Crystal. “I was… making sure everything was in balance, isn’t that what I was supposed to do?” remarked Flame. “Hmmmmm…. I still think something else happened, or you fell asleep again” says crystal laughing. “Hey! I bet you fell asleep to while I was gone!” says Flame. “Well duh, I didn’t have anything to do.” Replies Crystal. “Anyway, I’m going to go…..take another nap! Later!” responds Flame. Runs off. “Good I got away from her, now I can go visit the human world again.” Says Flame quietly. “What’s that?” Crystal says. “HEY!! YOU WERE EAVESDROPPING!!!!” yelled Flame. “So? What is this about the human world?” asks Crystal. “Nothing…” replies Flame. “You like someone form the human world don’t you?!” asks Crystal. “WAT!!!!!! Of course I don’t! I don’t have time to focus on guys, when I should be focusing on being a good queen!” remarks Flame. “oh yea then why were you going to go to the human world?” asks Crystal. “Hmmmmm….I was going to……OK FINE! I like a human so what?” questions Flame. “well nothing I want to go to!” says Crystal. “Fine.” says Flame. Opens portal, and jumps through.
Flame and Crystal jump out of portal. “So, Where is he?” asks Crystal. “Over there by the bonfire.” Replies Flame. Points at Mitchi. Walk over toward him. “Hey Mitchi, this is my friend Crystal.” Says Flame. “Hi” responds Mitchi and Crystal. “What are you doing out here?” asks Crystal. “Oh, I’m making smores, want to?” replies Mitchi. “Sure!” responds Crystal and Flame. They sit down near the fire, grab a marshmallow and a stick, and start roasting. “So what you been up to Flame?” asks Mitchi. “Umm... nothing really.” Replies Flame. Crystal lifts up her marshmallow but drops it on Flame’s arm. Mitchi looks at the burning marshmallow. Flame sits perfectly fine till Crystal starts looking at her. “What?” mouth flame to Crystal, looks down. “Hmmm… OH! Ooooowww ooooowww!!!!” says flame faking. Shakes it off. “That hurt!” replies Flame. Everyone starts laughing. “So Mitchi, do you think all deamons are bad?” asks Crystal. Mitchi looks awkwardly at Crystal for a moment then replies “well, my parents were killed be deamons. One day this guy came into our house he was about a little older than me. He shot fire out of his hand and storm clouds struck lightning around him. He through fire at my parents and killed them. He looked at me then left. The guy called himself the mighty deamon Zeiklauron.” Flame looks up in surprise, then looks at Crystal worried. “so yea, I say ALL deamons are bad! I swore to kill any deamon I found.” States Mitchi. Flame and Crystal stand up. “Hey we got to go. Were very busy but we will see you again soon!” says Flame. “Wait what about you? Do you hate all deamons?” asks Mitchi. Flame replies “I don’t know about all deamons but Zeiklauron yea, I hate him.” Under breath says “More then you can imagine.” Says Flame. “Later!” says everyone. Flame and Crystal run off, open a portal, and jump in.
Both jump out of the portal. Flame angrily runs up to the wall and smacks it right then and break a good 10 inches into the wall. “Ugh!!! Zeiklauron!!!!!!!!!!!!!!” yells Flame. “Calm down Flame.” Says Crystal. “I hate my brother all he does is torture me, trying to kill Kaito and all my friends!!! He has killed my parents yours and Mitchi’s!!!!!” screams Flame. “FLAME!!! Calm it down!! We had a great night except for that last part let’s just forget and move on please.” Begs Crystal. “For now I’ll will…I just fear the worst…” says Flame sadly.
Months passed and all of them had grand times together. Each day Flame and Mitchi got closer and closer till one faithful day Flame and Mitchi were alone sitting near a waterfall. Out of nowhere Mitchi leans over and kisses Flame on the lips. To Flame sparks flew and all she think was that she wanted it to last forever. Suddenly, the ground began to shake till a crack formed. Out of the crack rose Zeiklauron. Flame jumped to her feet in terror and rage. She wanted to strike her brother with fire balls, but then quickly stopped herself noticing Mitchi right beside her. “You...You killed my parents!!” rages Mitchi. “Now why aren’t you attacking me Flame? You seem so frustrated.” Smirked Zeiklauron. “You know exactly why I’m mad!!!” yells Flame. Zeiklauron uses a fire hand to grab Mitchi and hold him in air. “Let me go!!!” yells Mitchi. “Now you’ll have to attack me, sister.” Says Zeiklauron. Mitchi looks at Flame in shock. Flame holds her head down. She fires her hands up then blasts Zeiklauron. Zeiklauron drops Mitchi then blocks her attack. “Mitchi!!!” says Flame. She then runs to him to support him. “you were a deamon this whole time and didn’t even tell me! You are his sister! You are just another deamon!” says Mitchi. “No, I’m not!” responds Flame. “Yes you are. Just leave alone!” replies Mitchi. Flame swells with tears, wiped them away, then turns toward Zeiklauron. “You killed my parents, his parents, Crystal’s, and others. You have even tried to take Kaito away from me, but I’ve had it!!!!” Flame roars. She shoots fire out of her hands toward Zeiklauron. He dodges then blast her with lightning. She backfires it with tornado strike. Zeiklauron’s hands light up with a black flame. “No” states Flame. “watch out!!!” yells Mitchi. Zeiklauron releases the flame toward Flame. Mitchi jumps in front of her. They both start spiraling backward then to the floor. The dark flames had pierced Mitchi right in the heart. “NO!!!!”Flame cried out as she lay next to him. “I….love...you…” says Mitchi as he lays down and dies. “No….NNNNOO!!!!!! MITCHI!!!!!!” cries Flame. “Pity, but no mercy will I give.” Says Zeiklauron as he begins to fire up once more. Flame lights up her hands as the brightest light shines forth. “ughh… next time sister” responds Zeiklauron while vanishing. Crystal runs In and sees Flame leaning over Mitchi’s dead body. “I’m so sorry Flame. Come on let’s get back to Glacious. Opens portal then both walk through while Flame carries Mitchi.
They come out of portal. “We’ll get his funeral prepared. I know how much you cared for him, Flame. You did your best.” Says Crystal. “No…I didn’t do my best he died trying to save me even though he knew I was a deamon.. he told me he loved me” replied Flame sadly. “You just focus on being Glacious queen after the funeral I’ll return to my kingdom, but please try feel better” says Crystal sincerely. Flame nods her head. “Goodbye Crystal.” Portal opens and Crystal jumps in while holding Mitchi.
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“WHAT!!!!!!” says Flame. “What do you mean Kaito us mussing?!?!?!” yells Flame. I’m sorry your Lady, but no sight of him has been seen by your servants that went to the mermaid realm, Crystal is in her realm, but no sign of Kaito.” Says servants. “My dear brother Kaito is missing. What about Gaito and Zeiklauron? Do they have anything to do with this?!” asks Flame. “Actually my Lady your servants caught Gaito on the castle grounds. Do you wish to bring him in?” ask the servants. “Yes bring in dear Gaito.” Replies Flame. The servants walk outside the doors then return with Gaito in their hands. “Gaito! Where is Kaito? Where is our brother?!” snapped Flame. “Zeiklauron has him, but only a fool would dare challenge him I heard the last time you did you lost your lover.” Replies Gaito. “Shut it!! I will finally get my revenge on Zeiklauron for all that he has done. Servants secure the palace and take Gaito to the dungeons immediately!” says Flame. Portal opens. Flame jumps through.
Flame jumps out of portal into Zeiklauron’s castle. Flame sees him standing in the middle of the room. “Zeiklauron I’ve come to end it!” yells Flame. “I agree completely.” Replies Zeiklauron. A young person in a hood walks out from behind Zeiklauron. “Who is he?!” asks Flame. “He’s an old friend whose hatred for you I took and grew. I took out all the other emotions except hatred for you. Show yourself.” Commands Zeiklauron. The young person removes his hood. “It ...Can’t be” says Flame unsure. Standing in front f her is Mitchi. “MITCHI!!!!” she screamed. She couldn’t move. Out of nowhere he launched a dagger into her heart. As she stood there confused she fell down dead. Her body was then found by her servants and taken back to her palace where they hoped in her next life she would return to them to protect Kaito, Lead the people of Glacious, and avenge Mitchi.
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- Title: Darkened Love
- Artist: Enflamed Epnis
- Description: Another love story gone bad but no happy ending. If any questions just mail me them and i'll answer as soon as possble this story is part of a larger one.
- Date: 07/21/2008
- Tags: lovedeathflamemitchi
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Comments (5 Comments)
- OrangeThang - 06/29/2009
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Okay, I quit reading it after the first paragraph.
First of all, please use proper grammar, punctuation, spelling, etc.
Secondly, also what Julia said, when somebody new speaks, you start a new line. Its difficult to know whose talking when its all jumbled up.
Lastly, put some things into more detail. [ "Fine" replies Flame. Opens portal. "Later" says Flame. Jumps into portal. ] 'Opens portal' Who opened it? Try and make it more clear.
Other than those things, good try. - Report As Spam
- Julia Dream - 07/21/2008
- When a new person talks, they get a new paragraph. This is so difficult to read as is.
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- Emo_Chibi_Fruit_Basket - 07/21/2008
- Awsome story
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- small kid_21054 - 07/21/2008
- great story such a tragic ending though
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