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It was a cold, stormy night. Karine walked down the long corridor to her parent's bedroom. Her mind was blurry. All she heard was her mom's scream and a crash. She opend her parent's door and saw her mother on the floor, a pool of blood surrounding her. Karine screamed. Her father ran up to her from behind. He swung her around and screamed, "What are you doing in here?!" Karine was speechless. She pointed to her mother. "M....M....Mom....s-she..bleeding! Bleeding!" Karine stammered. Her father held a knife to her neck. "Karine, my pumpkin. I'm sorry, but your going to die today. Like Mommy did." He put pressure on the knife and *thap* went Karine's body onto the floor.
Her father regretted that action of killing his daughter and wife. About 6 months later, Karine began to haunt him, to watch his every move. One day, she had messed with him enough. She took a knife and found her father in his study. She was a ghostly white color, which scared her father. "Daddy, it's time for you to join me and Mommy." Well, let's say after that no one ever lived in that house again.....
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- by KateKerosene |
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- | Submitted on 10/20/2008 |
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- Title: Ghost Girl (a short story)
- Artist: KateKerosene
- Description: Sorry if there are typos!!!
- Date: 10/20/2008
- Tags: died
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Comments (2 Comments)
- LostOf Leberai - 03/09/2009
- Well put XxEmoBlondexX Try extending the story by placing more details. Details are what paint the picture for the audience. As for your grammar. It is the best I've seen today. ^^ Yay. Keep writing. I want to see more from you.
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- XxEmoBlondexX - 10/20/2008
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Very cool
and pretty nicely written but not the best I have seen.
I think you could use your talent on bigger stories.
So keep trying and making new stories and eventually you'll get that one right story that will be amazing!
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