I wished apon a star

• Artist: Seras Victoria118
• Description: this is somethink i made up when i was alone at home
  so i wrote this
  it is a very short story
  i hope you like it
  
  sighned
  x-tgal118-x
• Date: 11/27/2008
• Tags: wished apon star

I wished apon a star
not just any star
but my star
how was it my star? Well it all started when i was dreaming, it was a falling dream, but ever time i tried to wake up i couldn't, you know why
because it wasen't a dream, I was falling, falling into darkness
untill a hand extended from the darkness.
The hand unclenched, there was a voice that said
*This is your star to guide you through darkness when you fall and loose your way. You have 1 wish , just 1 then your star will go away.
The darkness faded and i was standing , staring out the window in my bedroom.
and 1 star in the sky would flash every time i looked at it
so i closed my eyes and made my wish
*i wish that this star will be mine forever to guide me when i fall and loose my way so this star would never ever fade away.*
That was the day
i wished upon a star. heart

Comments

[Singer Of Broken Souls]

I think it was great!

[Shiorins]

OMG!!!!! i loved it!!!!!!! it was really inspireing!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[themidnightclear]

also this "The hand unclenched" doesn't seem necessary, you do not state whether the hand is unclenched or clenched to begin with, so those who read and think that the hand is unclenched to begin with may get confused becasue its kind of hard to imagine a unclenching unclenched hand?

Other than that i quite liked it! Keep up the good work!