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I was running as fast as i could. My feet jabbing into jagged rocks and sharp sticks. I didn't care. All i cared about was making sure that the erasers didn't get their prey. Me. I could hear them now. They where getting closer. Then I heard the barking. They had dogs. Well, they where kind of like dogs themselves. Big, fully armed, dogs. They where getting closer still. So close that i could hear their feet hitting the ground and their heavy breathing. Then i saw the dim light up ahead. All i needed was a clearing to make my escape. I burst through the trees and had to skid to a stop. It wasn't a clearing. It was a cliff.
I had to do it.
I saw the erasers burst through the trees behind me.
I jumped off the edge.
Now you might think I'm crazy, but just hear me out.
All i could hear was the air rushing past me head. Then i flexed my back muscles so my wings unfurled. They came out so fast that it hurt.
(Note to self: Unfurling wings when falling hurts a ton.)
I jeered upward and started flying. I flew up above the erasers and saw them shaking furry paws up at me. One of them had a gun. He pointed it at me and a red dot appeared on my tattered night gown. Then, he fired.
- by assassin number 392 |
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- | Submitted on 12/07/2008 |
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- Title: Running
- Artist: assassin number 392
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Description:
This is a fan fiction of the book "Maximum Ride- The Angel Experiment."
It took me a year to finish it.
I really hope you like it.
There is more and if i get a lot of good comments i will post the rest of the story.:D - Date: 12/07/2008
- Tags: running
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Comments (5 Comments)
- gabbwee2 - 06/13/2009
- Yeah very good needs just a little work, thanks for the comment on blood chronicles, glad someone liked it. yours is very good to 5/5
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- BeaniesFTW - 12/14/2008
- I was joking. I didn't mean offense, and I gave your story a good rating. Keep it up.
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- Luna_luna8 - 12/10/2008
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interesting!
i wanna know more!
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- Goose Saved The Day - 12/07/2008
- The idea behind it sounds great, but- the sentence structure is... well... simple. It lacks depth and 'describing words'. Just work on it a bit more and revise here and there. (Note to you: Also work on Punctuation, capitalisation, and fragment sentences.(avoiding fragment sent.) It helps a lot in the long run.) Like I said though the idea behind it intrigues me. Grats. =)
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- BeaniesFTW - 12/07/2008
- what??? erasers...are chasing them? XD
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