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“See you around.” I can still feel his lips against mine.
Under the light of a street lamp I stood. I was lost; I didn’t know where I was or what I was doing here. So I just stood like a statue, lost in my mind that went in circles, until from the corner of my eye I saw a man come out from an alley. The tall, dark, and handsome kind; he looked at me. There was something in his eyes that I saw for just a second, then it was gone. “What’s someone as good lookin’ as you doin’ here?” It sounded as if he said it often. “Just standing around.” I didn’t want him to think that I was lost, even though I was. “I see.” He was close to me now; I could almost feel his body heat. “What do you mean by that?” There was no reply; he was too busy kissing me. His body pressed against mine, pinning us up against that lamp post. I had never felt anything like this before; it was sweet but hot at the same time, it felt like I was on fire. I wanted it to last, but at that moment it ended. I stood there breathless, looking at him. Waiting for him to say something. “See you around.” With that, he walked off into that darkness. So, I wait at this street lamp every night in hopes that he will return.
- by Dark_Gale017 |
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- | Submitted on 12/14/2008 |
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- Title: Street Lamp
- Artist: Dark_Gale017
- Description: I wrote this in class, that was my math class.
- Date: 12/14/2008
- Tags: street lamp
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Comments (2 Comments)
- Sugar Quill Drops - 07/14/2009
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If you enhance your wording this would be so much more better. For example, you use "just", a lot. Try "simply" here and there .
By enhancing wording I mean changing stuff like "I didn’t want him to think that I was lost, even though I was." to something more like "I didn't want to make it seem as though I was lost, even if that was the truth." Little stuff like that will make this a much better read. 3/5 stars. : - Report As Spam
- Duo-Maxwell017 - 12/19/2008
- I like it, did write this is SanFan or something?
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