a very dark place.......

• Artist: johanaX_X
• Description: this is a scary story
  
  one fateful night i guss you would assume that life is easier but life is harder cause death is peaceful easy right but in this case its harder this took 14 years to write cause i am in a very dark place.......
• Date: 04/26/2009
• Tags: very dark place

one day a little girl was walking down the street but just then she fell into the sewer but she heard a strange noise she was very scared so she ran but she tripped over a dead body and half its face was eaten off! something or someone was in here she got up from the ground and she heard a screech it was like nails on a chalk board she ran but she got a headache from the noise she also found a flashlight so she could see better just then she fell and broke her leg and the bone was sticking out so she wished she was dead and that came true this thing just completely ravaged her and it was scary her face was just a little blood and a little meat and her hair and eyeballs that was all that was left
2 years later.......................
her cousin was kinda like her but i guess that they were different in a way maybe?
hmmmm.......well she was walking in the forest and she saw like a creature go in a cave that went down.......the creature was big like a wolf and Grey like some sort of bat?
but she thought the creature came up from hell its self it was really freaky
"could it be the same creature that killed my cousin?" she thought
and so she followed the creature just then the cave collapsed with tears streaming down her face she kept going into the tunnel all of a sudden she fell in the sewer weird so she kept going she found the dead body of her cousin she said"oh my god god please help me"
and she found a light but it was only a crack too bad...."o my god"she said she saw the creature and it ate her then there was no bones hair or eye balls it ate all of her
THE.....
END.....

Comments

[Kazumi_Mori]

i kinda like it little more detail here then there sis then it'll be okay

[BigMouth12349]

Okay, you said yourself this was a fake story, so for that its okay. However, I think that with a little more detail it could be a real story, 'cause the idea is really good. So... 3/5.

[johanaX_X]

omg it did not take 14 years to write omg i am trying to make a fake story ok and stop with these mean comments

[Hidariude]

This took 14 years to write? It took only half that time for me to iron out the details for 7th Moon, and only a couple months to actually write it down, and it was still better than this. Please stop wasting your gold on these writing arena submissions if this is the best you can do. And for the love of god, use a period!

[Your Mother Confessor]

bleh.......not that great to be honest. You could use better details. 1/5