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Alice Schinger was skipping down a trail in the woods as she saw this flash of light and then saw darkness. She Blinked a few times as the darkness went away. She Closed her eyes for a few seconds. She heard voice saying "Open Your eyes Alice. Open Them. I know you want to see me." She made herself think it was all in her head but, she knew it was right in back of her. She Turned around as she felt a knife go through her neck. as soon as a blink she fell to the ground and was laying in a puddle of blood. She was fadding into complete darkness as she heard scampering of dog paws. at the end of her life, a tear ran down her cheek.
A few days later a Wonderful couple, the Willsons, were walking down that same very trail and came to a spot as Mrs. Willson had to stop to tie her shoe. She hadn't noticed the body right next to her foot untill she looked up from tieing her shoe. They contacted the police as quick as they could. A whole squat team came and did some envestigating. They found a torn part of a dress, no regular dress, a maiden dress. a strand of greyish blackish dog hair, when they flipped Alice over, they saw the knife in her neck. They knew it was time for a perfeshional. They Called a very smart detective from Nashville, Tenesee. The Detective flew out to Kettle Corn, Kansas, where Alice was found dead in the woods.the detective went out alone to search but once again nothing.He saw a flash of light and then saw darkness. He Hear a voice saying "You shouldn't have came out here alone." The Detective felt a bullet go through his stomach. another time through his leg. another through his other leg. He thought "how come I didn't hear the gun?" and though he still couldn't see he fell face first into the ground. into a puddle... of blood.
- by x-- big time rush |
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- | Submitted on 07/18/2009 |
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- Title: Alice Is Dead
- Artist: x-- big time rush
- Description: a Girl Alice Schinger Thought someone was trying to controll her as then she dies and the case is trying to be solved HOW she became dead.
- Date: 07/18/2009
- Tags: alice dead
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Comments (1 Comments)
- Aeris The Wolf - 08/21/2009
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The storyline is a bit 'thin'. Not too many descriptive details and a couple noticeable spelling and grammar errors.
It's hard to tell where the storyline's going and that's usually what bores readers. With a little touching up, It could be quite interesting. ^^ - Report As Spam