- The first time ive seen you. you've tooken the key to my heart and locked it up. Im yours now. and i cant help to think about you. everything reminds me of your pretty face. we have gone further than i kiss. And its made me feel awfull because you have somone elses heart to portect. but hes not aware of. This. and u say its ok but my soul say i cant. i just....cant but it feels right. and im so confuesd. but yet i feel alright....with you
- Title: My heart beats for u
- Artist: Voidling
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the first time ive seen you. youve tooken the key to my heart and locked it up.
if you can guess what this story is about ill give a 500 gold :o - Date: 01/22/2011
- Tags: myheart mygirl herjudgement
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Comments (7 Comments)
- vykavolt - 03/10/2020
- The romantic mood you tried to set with this piece felt a bit akward because of how many typos and gramatical errors there are in the text. I feel like this text could be very beautifull if you attempted to make it into a short poem instead.
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- Your Letdown - 12/21/2011
- Btw check out ma enteries! Its called Roses and Thorns :3!!
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- Your Letdown - 12/21/2011
- The story is about the one you love forever and ever, chur bf :3!!
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- junebug217 - 07/06/2011
- That's really awesome!!
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- Voidling - 06/08/2011
- Thanks for the tip. ^^
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- Kumajirou-Canada - 06/08/2011
- Also, I'd understand if you did capitalize and 'stuff' your poem thingy. I would feel awkward if my guy tried to make it too perfect >.<
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- Kumajirou-Canada - 06/08/2011
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Try to include apostraphies and capitalization. (Tooken... It's "Taken" wink Not like you care... Just helping out ^^ It should also be in poetry.
Just some heads up. It was really cute ^^ - Report As Spam