- claire was busy getting ready for bed, as the big test was the next day was the huge exam. she studied ard for this exam. claire was worried because the date of the exam was 09/09/09. she though that that day was the end of the world- which was dumb. when she got to bed she couldn't sleep. she kept thinking about dieing. "why cant i have a day off school with my mom and dad?",she thought in her head. she kept tosing and turning and held on tight to her blanket. she shut her eyes tight and entrually feel asleep. the next day she woke up. she knew she had 3 hours to live. she looked at herself in th mirror. she looked at every angle of her smooth pale skin and fixed up her messy brown hair. she then saw something in the mirror. she got scared and pretended she didn't notice. she saw it again, but this time she got a proper look. a man with a black hoodie and a huge pointy axe was looking right at her. "time to die! times up!", the man said in a dark evil tone. Claire screamed and droped her comb, then was dragged into the mirror. Her dad ran up the stairs into the bathroom, to see his daughter no where to be seen and the whole sink filled with blood.
- by Something Orignal |
- Non Fiction
- | Submitted on 02/07/2009 |
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- Title: 09/09/09
- Artist: Something Orignal
- Description: please dont worry! the world won't end at 09/09/09 cant you see this is a fiction! tell me what i need to improve about this story so i can do better next time.
- Date: 02/07/2009
- Tags: septemberthe9th2009
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Comments (7 Comments)
- Fantastic Nightmares - 04/09/2010
- Just the grammar. Good story though.
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- CUTE prettyness13 - 07/09/2009
- i think this is really dumb, ur like copying of movies and books! it wasnt scary at all!!
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- Felissith - 05/28/2009
- Reminds me of "Prom Night"
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- Starrybun - 04/13/2009
- It's really good there is of course some problems though. On her name it needs a captial C and at the start of sentences. Some words need correcting too. I want to know the rest D:
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- Something Orignal - 02/25/2009
- sorry i wrote it was non-fiction before. i got a little confused lol
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- Something Orignal - 02/08/2009
- my bad razz
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- Neko Minamino - 02/07/2009
- ...But isn't it fiction? Fiction is when it's a story, when it isn't real. As a fiction, I guess it might be pretty good if you elaborated and fixed all the technical mistakes in it.
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