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PROLOGE- NEW LIFE.
There is an old saying do what you can with what you have. Some people think that is good advice but I am kind of on the other side of the line. Now I lived like that for sixteen long years but just now I mean right now it has just changed for the worse. My name is Noah Rivers and I can’t believe it but I’m moving away from Albany New York too go to a foster family in Anchorage, Alaska. My last name was Sterning but now it is Rivers.
The city I am going to is a dark city but thanks to the technology of 2015 it’s actually just a cloudy damp, wet town. The train ride there is horrible it is like swimming with 1,000 middle aged, old, and young people. As I take my seat I start to look around and I find that I got on the wrong bus! I pack up my belongings and run out. After about ten minutes I sit down angrily and have given up hope. Then suddenly I looked up and saw that I was sitting right in front of my bus! I hurry to get on…… YES! I wasn’t late; I find my seat and sit.
Strangely there is a rather young man coming to sit by me. As he sits down I decide to introduce myself properly.
“Hello, sir” I said. As I said that one sentence he looked at me like I was the craziest person on this bus.
“What is your problem?” He said. Now I was the one looking at him funny. “You could get in a lot of trouble introducing your self ‘round here”. He said. I decided there was a good reason for this so I decided to dig to find about.
“Why will I get hurt by someone?” I asked awaiting a response."more than just hurt" i said "what do you mean" I said
"vampires!" he said. I thought Yeah right....
- by sparowblade12 |
- Non Fiction
- | Submitted on 02/09/2009 |
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- Title: White Dusk proulouge
- Artist: sparowblade12
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Description:
a boy named noah rivers is going to a town in alaska but doesent know that
the city is hot spot for vampire sightings what may happen.
this is just a draft of my prolouge hope ya like it! - Date: 02/09/2009
- Tags: white dusk
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Comments (7 Comments)
- Star Chase - 02/26/2009
- and have your character stop and smell the roses ok! Other then that it is a great story and I cannot wait to read more!! ^^ Btw read this part second.
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- Star Chase - 02/26/2009
- I really like it so far. I think this story has great potential and I would love to read more! Some constructive criticism would be to work on a few gramatical errors. Also there are some spots that are a little confuzing because it feels like that story is moving way to fast. On second he is on the train, the next he is on a bus. I got a little lost there. Try adding a little more detail, describe the sights more, go into how he is feeling when he is traveling. Don't be afraid to take your time
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- kinoue - 02/16/2009
- hmm... let me gess he has to be chased by mical jackson next time he talks to a guy? (lol)
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- Kijar - 02/16/2009
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Anyways.............................
Good start, can't wait to read if he dies or not and how many people he joins up with. - Report As Spam
- Kijar - 02/16/2009
- Typo's. Impropper Grammer. Doesn't Make Sense. Yep you wrote that. lol jk.
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- sparowblade12 - 02/11/2009
- i like vampires
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