- "vlad" screamed rosie from behind him "what" Vlad answered back "look out behind you" Rosie yelled pointing behind him then out of no where a figure came down from the trees Vlad ducked and the figure came tords Rosie and grabs her and pulles her to the top pf a tree "ROSIE NO! let her go" Vlad yelled at figure then i came out of the darkness from the tree "D'ablo. Let her go now!" Vlad said throught grintted teeth then D'ablo pulled out a shard object from behind his back and put it up to Rosie's neck "NO ROSIE! don't you dare!" Vlad yelled at D'ablo "Come with me to Elysia and i will let her go." D'ablo said putting the knife closer to Rosie's neck "Never. Now let her. NO DON'T!" when Vlad said never D'alo put the knife closer to Rosie's neck "I will ask one more time come to Elysia with me or watch the love of your life die." D'ablo started to inching closer with the knife to Rsie's neck "1 2." D'ablo started to count "Fine i will just let Rosie go."Vlad said "Good boy." D'abo said and doroped Rsoie to the ground "Rosie!" Vlad said running forrwerd to catch Rosie when he cout Rosie he set her on the cold ground "Rosie." Vlad looked for any injories and noticed that there was a cut on her neck "You MONSTER YOU SAID THAT YOU WOULDN'T HURT HER IF I WENT WITH YOU!" Vlad yelled at D'ablo "Vlad." Rosie said in a weak voice "Rosie are you ok?" Vlad asked picking her up and putting her up and putting her on his lap "I ma fine just.." then Rosie was cut off by D'ablo "Come on boy lets go." "NO!" Vlad yelled "Not withot Rosie." Vlad said "Vlad no don't." Rosie said taking his hand and looking into his eyes at the sound of Vlad saing "Not without Rosie" he smerked "With her he could be killed for having a relashonship with a human." D'ablo whispered to himself because vampires are not aloud to have a relashonship with humans. 'Fine she can come to." D;ablo said Vlad picked up Rosie and carried her to a car that was wating on the street outside of the forest Vlad got in and put Rosie in the middle and let her rest and his lap Vlad watched her sleep and touched her face, "So why are ou making me go to Elysia with you?" Vlad asked D'ablo "You are needed." D'ablo said "Why?" Vlad said and D'ablo ignored this. it felt like 2 minutes when we were finally there 'D'ablo opened the door and grabbed Rosie by the collar and pulled her out of the car "HEY!" Vlad yelled and jumpped out of the car "Let her go." Vlad said then 2 huge guys came out of no where and D'ablo handed Rosie to them they walked away with Rosie "Rosie." Vlad yelled to her "Vlad help." Rosie yelled back "What are you doing with her "'Just putting her in a cell so she doesn't get in the way." D'ablo said grabbing Vlad by th e wrist and pulling him to a dark ally when we went into the ally there was a door and D'ablo put his hand and the door and then it opened and D'ablo pushed Vlad in and Vlad saw a body on the ground and saw that it was Rosie "Rosie!" Vlad yeled running to her but when he reached out to her she dissapeard "What did you do with her?!" Vlad yelled at D'ablo but when he turned around to look at D'ablo he was gone and the door was shut. "VLAD HELP ME!" Rosie called from somewhere "Rosie where are you!?" Vlad yelled looking around "Up here !" Rosie yelled and Vlad looked up and saw that Rosie was being dragged away by the 2 huge guys "Vladimer." a soft low voice said "Who are you what are you doing whith rosie!?" Vlad yelled at the man "She is a human?" the man asked ignoring his questions "What is it to you." Vlad said "Vladimer you do know the lwas of being a vampire don't you?" the man asked leaning forworred his face was all scared and his mouth had a cut on it "Who are you?" Vlad asked the man "Oh i am henry." Henry said 'Now you do know the laws of being a vampire?" Henry asked "No." Vlad answered "Oh that is to bad because the laws clearly states tat a vampire main not have a relasonship with a human." Henry said standding up "So wha do you want with Rosie and me?" Vlad asked "Oh yes you are here to die." Henry said then he snapped his fingers and the 2 huge men came and grabbed vlad and dragged him away vlad struggled to get away but no use by the time he stopped he was trowen into a cell and there was a crying girl in it "Vlad?" the girl said looking up "Yes who are yo.." then he was cut of by the girl jummping into his arms "Oh Vald what is going on?" The girl asked crying into his chest "Rosie?" Vlad asked"Yes" Rosie answered "Oh Rosie oh my god you are alive." AND THAT IS ALL I GOT FOR NOW WELL BECAUSE I HAVE TO GO I WILL FINISHE IT LATER
- by ZERO of 13 |
- Non Fiction
- | Submitted on 08/06/2009 |
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- Title: vlad
- Artist: ZERO of 13
- Description: i just had an idea for a story and this is whati got so far
- Date: 08/06/2009
- Tags: vlad
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Comments (2 Comments)
- Sasakisakeno - 08/22/2009
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First thing, this is all constructive criticism I'm going to give you biggrin
Spacing. Whenever someone talks you should always try to space them. Grammar/Spelling. Spelling is easy to correct since there's spell check but you should always read over it. Grammer is a bit trickier but you should still always read over your story to make sure it's smooth. Present/Past time. There's a lot of switching going on which makes it confusing combined with grammar mistakes. Punctuation is also very important. - Report As Spam
- kawaiigore - 08/15/2009
- hmmm Vlad? that name is from many books and also a communist Russian leader! Vladamir or Vladamir
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