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We stood around her corpse:
little scientists, pretending
she was our latest experiment.
We measured her trajectory
from ledge to concrete, had numbers
to freeze her last moments in;
we took pictures, and outlined her body
in chalk.
She was our immortal question now.
She could not escape our pages and frames.
Did she scream?
Did she crack like a blood-filled egg
knocked accidentally out of the fridge
when someone reached for the milk?
Could we have heard her
if we listened hard enough?
Her body never said a word.
Broken, it traveled through the night:
sirens blaring above, tires screeching below.
All we can guess is that her mind was a forest,
and no one was there to hear her make a sound.
- Title: If a Tree Falls...
- Artist: Astaire
- Description: I mostly write in free verse, so this piece doesn't have a set meter or rhyme scheme. The title is supposed to be reminiscent of the age-old question, "If a tree falls in the forest, and no one is around to hear, does it make a sound?"
- Date: 07/15/2008
- Tags: tree forest suicide
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Comments (7 Comments)
- Astaire - 07/15/2008
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Thank you, everyone! I'm so glad the feedback has been positive thus far.
@ Espress-u - If I had the focus for novels, I would write them. I really do want to, but I never find an idea I can stick with. Also, I love your exact rating. whee Lets me know exactly where I stand. - Report As Spam
- Fake Plastic Soldier - 07/15/2008
- Amazing and intriguing
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- Espress-u - 07/15/2008
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Pretty intense, encapturing, etc... A little gruesome ^^; but hey, not all poetry is about ponies and rainbows ne? Good link to the old philosophical question too. I really think you should write books... I'm sure you'd create those stories that nobody could get their nose out of.
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- Roux Arcus - 07/15/2008
- wow... it kinda scared me but I like your poem. I also love the metaphors you put in it. kudos, great poet biggrin
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- Somethings_Fishy-Fish - 07/15/2008
- Wow this is amazing what an ending as well. It's layered and rich and has it's physiological twist - very nice!
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- Astaire - 07/15/2008
- Wow, thank you so much to everyone who has rated/commented thus far! I really appreciate it. heart
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- MustangDragon - 07/15/2008
- Hot damn, that's good. Scares me.
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