The Girl

• Artist: Haseo the Adept Terror
• Description: ...
• Date: 11/29/2008
• Tags: girl

There is a girl
In my little world
I always think about
She's perfect in near everyway
This I would never doubt
But in comparison to me
I feel so lone inside
For I am just a jester
In the courtroom of her life
A princess and a puaper
These two things could never be
Could such a beauty love a beast
On the inside like me
The daydreams
Never ending still
A constant torment now
For these things show me what could be
Instead of how things are right now
Sometimes they make me lose a grip
On my reality
And drift asleep into a land
With her there right beside me
Why can't I shake this feeling
We could be no more than friends
But my heart aches for her touch
It must have her
Before my story ends

Comments

[mandymia]

WOW thats amazing!!! smile im a writer 2 but i wont put anything on here cuz i dont want someone to steal my story ideas smile u must be a real romantic smile i am 2!!! bravo, this is FABULOUS

-*Mandy, darling*

[Morpheus167]

eh is kk. F*** that frekin awsome

[Tewr]

This is really good. I like the flow of it, but I think that commas should be inserted.

[Posh Fairy 01]

10/10!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
lol...

[Angel blood_Devil heart]

Good job! This is amazing.

[herpelerp]

fgfyg

[MoonFilledTears]

This isn't bad... The only thing I would really suggest is, because this poem rhymes, to work on the rhythem in a couple of places... Other than that, good job! It shows that you have an emotional connection with the content of your writing. You're able to get the feeling across to a third party person, which is pretty hard to do^^