Love You, Forever

• Artist: Mugetsu Ookamiza
• Description: I first shared this online on the anniversary of the loss of a dear friend who, if circumstances had been a little different, could have become something more.
  
  this is a poem that has been percolating in my head for years. the first part actually came to mind back in '94 or '95. later I gathered all together, mucked about with the order and rhythm and came up with a fairly finished product. (ignore the "year's" typo, it won't let me correct it)
• Date: 07/18/2008
• Tags: poem love loss forever

If there's one thing I could say
Then it's 'please don't go away'
'Cuz I'll love you, forever

Every night and every day
Every breath and every way
Gonna love you, forever

Lying in your arms that night
Nothing ever felt so right
Wanna love you, forever

And now even though you're gone
The memory still is strong
'Cuz I love you, forever

As the years go flying by
I still think of you and sigh
My dearest love, forever

Looking back upon these years
the smiles were worth the tears
My truest love, forever

I know deep within my heart
We will never be apart
You and I, love, forever

Comments

[Mugetsu Ookamiza]

the "forever" bit is supposed to tie everything together. some people do something like that with poetry and lyrics to keep everything connected. I could have used synonyms for it in each line, but then the rhythm would be lost. forever is 3 syllables, whereas eternity is 4 and always is 2. the rhythm was intended to pull it together as well so the pattern shouldn't be broken.

[MalicaNeko93]

It's lovely...but I just find that the repetition of forever isn't needed(use forever..but not every other line) or at least use other terms like all eternity and all my life...or get something to rhyme with forever..sorry to nitpick...it's a thing of mine when it comes to peices of literature

[Charmaine_Ah_Sheh]

omg! i really luv it... so sweet plz read my poem its called It was you,It was Death and leave a comment thxs XD

[trueprfashn]

aaaaww its nice =_D