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I was on the edge
Ready to throw myself over
When I saw a solitary image of beauty...
...Will I ever tell her that she saved my life?
Her body twists without dignity or thought
for why she is here
And men whose thoughts are segregated
from moral nature
make room for the violation and
enact such grim labor.
A cloud burst to pieces
when the voices in my head cried mercy
and I took the rare form of icons rejected
from a heaven dissected
Wisps of my dream
Return to me
The horror of that day
Still it stays
Little flutters give her away
She hides her fears
Sheds not a tear
Swears by the moon
For she is not a fool
I had a premonition of things to come,
of the failure I destined to.
Her rejection wounds me
where no healer's touch may revive.
I will take an instrument in hand
and forge away chords until I have
wrought sorrow.
I drift away from the gentle caress
of my mind into the void that lies beyond it.
I can no longer take refuge in my head,
For she lives there forever now.
- Title: Disconnected Memories
- Artist: Sadette
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Description:
Ok so this poem is ALL OVER THE PLACE!
Its the MOST random poem I think I have ever written... In 10 minutes lol
So I know for a fact that it has no real correct anything in it lol. Maybe it'd help if I got some tips, maybe I should move the stanzas around or something let me know. Thanks ppl.
Criticscm helps us grow- Jenny Sadis - Date: 08/28/2008
- Tags: dreamswarlovewomandivine
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Comments (3 Comments)
- MewCoraline - 06/02/2009
- thats really deep.
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- I_Luv_Shorts - 02/04/2009
- wow it realy got to me, i wanted to be right there with the charactor surprised n the edge,then in dreams wow very powerful 800/5
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- philelectricguitar - 12/13/2008
- Well, that's... pretty confusing. But, the rhyming and everything sounded good. I sort of get the plot. Still, pretty good! 4/5
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