Illusions

• Artist: Tsume Rokaro
• Description: This one is copied from my journal because I finally have a place to submit it for ratings that aren't just my best friends.
  
  Anyway, I did this one last year I think. *does remember the exact date* But it's my sister's favorite...and also one of my favorites out of what I've done. I didn't really base it off anything other than my own feelings. Enjoy and please tell me what you think. *wants to know*
• Date: 09/04/2008
• Tags: illusions

And so the war is won
And our world comes undone
Ushering in a new era
Into this world.
Endless illusions
Where illusions had still remained.
My hand in yours
Our hearts fuse.
Your lips on mine;
Your hands in mine.
The war is won.
Our world is undone.
We hold our breath,
And jump.
And so the ocean flies to meet us.
One kiss left
Before waves usher
Both of us into the security
Found in nonillusions.
Our war with illusions is won,
Our world is now undone,
And all will see
Our hearts alive
Burning with a passion
No one can touch.
Ours alone
The waves fold in around us.
Hands intertwined
Our lips part for the killing kiss.
Cold lips on cold lips,
Water rushes in.
No more breath nor life
Not a single beat.
But we're together.

Comments

[SilentJ75]

Amaaaaaaziing! biggrin
5/5

[possum fool]

this is amazing
i wish i could write like you

[RaiRass_Rosato]

Good poem, Tsume. ^^ Well written indeed. *Understands why it's your favorite*

[Angeladr7]

aww, it's very good. It has that whole romantic tragedy vibe going on. beautifully written.

[Gene_starwind33]

I like it alot. I think i wrote something like that but i can't say it was done that well. The words flowed easily. I think the only thing that could be improved is the passion of it in a sense.

[NoiseInTheShadows]

Wow. It totally reminds me of Broken Bride *Heart breaks all over again*
Good job.

[BlackParadeRain]

whoa it was easy to picture what you wrote. Amazing job its just outstanding