suffocate

• Artist: UNKNOW dude ii
• Description: comments?
• Date: 09/27/2008
• Tags: suffocate

Take a final look
as I take a final breath
as for when I finish writing this poem
what’s left of my heart will suffocate to death

Watch me struggle
Watch as I fail to breathe
look at me suffocate
watch my soul leave

Why can’t I breathe?
Why is it so hard to?
You can spend hours trying to find out
and never realize the answer is you

You leave me breathless
you leave me without air;
I die a little more inside
whenever you’re not there

Comments

[Guilt-na Doll]

Well, it's classic emo love/loss poem, but it was very well wirtten, I will give you props on that.

It was set apart from the usual clichei poems though, good grammar and dialouge not often used in the amature poems usually posted up.

Really good work and keep it up. <3

[Lizabite]

this is great!! it's what poetry is all about! i agree with ashsnowgirl11, it took my breath away!

[holy_angel_of_doom]

boy this is good..i can just read poems till my last breath.... smile

[Apocalyptic Beatdown]

and here I was conteplating how to contact you and make sure you didn't commit suicide.

[ashsnowgirl11]

wow, that poem took MY breath away. i love the way ppl can display their feelings though writing!