Wings

• Artist: karasu--kr0w
• Description: This poem I use my own method to the rhythm: a,b,c,b,d,a,e. It is about people who wish themselves everything but can't see what their world is really made of. This is the first poem I have submitted into the contest.
• Date: 10/13/2008
• Tags: wings wish wishes blind blind

Why is the world such?
A world where you cannot break,
Break any boundaries with your own hands.
A world where you are weak,
Using metals in place of your wings.
You want this and that too much,
But you are blind to see what is beyond.

If I just had wings to fly I will be happy,
But is that truly sincere?
How can I know that I won't wish something else?
To wish myself somewhere not here.
To wish myself freedom in the sky.
All these wishes are sapping,
Sapping my ability to see what is beyond.

Why is the world such?
A world where you can break,
Break any boundaries.
A world where you aren't weak.
You can use metals in place of your wings.
Don't wish this and that so much,
Instead, see what is beyond.

Comments

[Elysione]

Kool poem
makes me feel all dreamy

[anna-the-spanner]

I really love it!

It really inthralled me (?) Anyway, I kinda lost myslef in that fantasy world.
Kepp writing dude!

[karasu--kr0w]

I tried a little to make it that way so that you have to think more about it but maybe it would be better if I linked the last two stanzas...

[Kyle Cohen]

this is a really good poem just. one lil thing could help it. if you related your 3 blocks more. but over all 4 stars smile