(undecided)

• Artist: Insane Jester646
• Description: Don't know thought about it tonight... i don't know too short to be a song...
  but it was suppose to be one...
  Comment please though
• Date: 11/26/2008
• Tags: undecided

What i've been told
there was nothing behold
how do you know how i am
to be there along side an empty wall.

Shadows fading in the room,
light appeared beyond this gloom
when i took this last stand...

when i felt the those last tear
without you ooh ooh ooh

Please just let it go
i don't want you leave me alone in the dark
only hoping there was someone new

The dark waiting light to weaken
Shadows hold upon the stricken
Without you, without me,
it just one less melody

So don't leave me here.... Alone

Comments

[cocaine rabbit]

i like the way you write i just dont like rhyming...ive read all of you poems 5/5

rate mine please

[XxBeautifulxLiesxX]

hey its really really good.more of a poem then a song but songs can be short.add some things to it to make it longer.but for a poem standard take out the "ooh ooh ooh"...mkay?haha make sure you check out some of my poems.other than 5/5.good job.keep writing.;]

[Sweet outsiders]

I think that's really good! I have a composition book full of songs that I have written in my bedroom. It may be a little short. But that's ok. what I would do if you want to make it longer is save it and set aside, then when you have some more motive you can just add on. But all in all though it is really good.