My Will

• Artist: angel_dark_blue
• Description:
• Date: 01/20/2009
• Tags: will

To My Lovely redface :

I will give you all my love

I will give you all my heart heart

I will give you everything you want

Yes I'll do it......

as long as you promise

to keep your devotion

'cause I don't wanna be fooled

by someone who I love so much crying

so please keep your faith with me......

Comments

[littleblackcat3]

I can tell you are trying to get a message across, but I would really like to see some more depth in what you are feeling. It's hard for a reader to place themselves in your writing if they are not even sure how to relate. I think that this is a great start, and I hope you don't take offense to my comment.