Betrayal

• Artist: xxbatmans-bridexx
• Description: please give criticism...or complements...
• Date: 01/25/2009
• Tags: betrayal

She sat in the dark
In a corner all alone
She was thinking
About him
About the memories they shared
About the fun times they had
About his soft kisses
And his gentle hugs
About the love they shared

She knew he wasn’t alone tonight
She knew that girl was there
She could picture it in her mind
She couldn’t stand the thought of her lips on his
She couldn’t take it

She held the knife close to her heart
She wanted it to end
She couldn’t imagine the thought of being without him
He was the one who showed her a life worth living for
He was the one that she wanted to spend the rest of her life with

Her hand was shaking
She wanted it to end
She was scared
She couldn’t go on
She ended everything right there

He sat there in a corner
All alone in the dark
He realized what he had done
He was thinking
About her
About the memories they shared
About the fun times they had
Her soft touch
Her sweet lips
He couldn’t take it

He was alone and scared
The thought of living without her haunted him
No one was there
She was gone
His life
His soul…
Shattered
That day that he broke her heart
He couldn’t bare the thought of living without her
So he ended his life right there

Comments

[Toast Museum]

I like how you didn't use punctuation on the sentences.
I see some like this where every sentence has punctuation, Such an eyesore. But I did really like it. I thought it was sweet in a weird way 5/5

[Arrow-Den]

i like this one 3

[XXdemon_crayonXX]

i like it...exspecially when you reapeat the beginning