Naked (Poem By Me XD)

• Artist: L e n n o n xx
• Description: ( F.Y.I i didnt actually lose my dad hes still alive!!!) anyway.... This poem is about a girl who loses her father and that protected and warm feeling she once felt arround him are now gone.
• Date: 02/01/2009
• Tags: naked poem

You, were my sanctuary, my protector, my one true friend.

You collected my broken pieces and put me back together, you were my guardian angel.

The feelings I felt around you, I still remember, I felt secure, warm, and most of all loved.

But now you have deserted me, those feelings are replaced, I feel exposed and all alone, you left me unprotected from this cruel, cold world.

A world in which I am by myself, now I lie on the floor contemplating my life, I feel…naked, my skin is my only shield.

I can’t live such a life where I am so out in the open, exposed with no cover.
You left me to join grandpa, and with you went my soul.

I wish to hold your hand again, and feel that special warmth, I want my loving father back, my protector and my friend.

Comments

[estrella826]

i love this poem
it sounds very nice!! wink

[XxGothicXxManXx]

this is a very good poem.
But i'm hppy to say.
A five is the highest for today.

[xXLaura_LovelyXx]

hmm.

[Dancing Armadillo Mage]

In the first line I think the comman would be better after were. I don't think your forth line flows very well. All and all I think this a decent poem. The fifth liine is definately my favorite, especially "I feel...naked." Very cool timing.

[Searching_Soul]

the feelings of losing a parent are difficult to describe though writing is a remedy (in my opinion). good work smile

[L e n n o n xx]

Thanks :3

[Shimmering Bubbles]

[1st comment]
THIS IS AWESOME <3