the class ring

• Artist: PrettyLittleMia
• Description: well i tryed to put emotion into the poem like anyone would uh
  well theres not much to say um make sure to decide where in ur opinions i need improvment and uh ya know ill think about some of ur comments and might cinsiter where u think there is needing improvment
• Date: 07/04/2009
• Tags: classring

Close the door he paused to stand
he took his class ring off his hand
All who were watching did'nt dare speak
as a silent tear slid down his cheek ,
All though memories ran ,
laughing and playing in the sand
but, no her hands were so cold
he'd never agin get to hold
no one dare spoke as he bent down near ,
and whispered an "i love you" in her ear
and touching her face he started to cry
he put his class ring on he wanted to die ,
and just as the wind started to blow
they lowerd her casket into the snow

Comments

[007Sasuke]

Wow, that made me a little sad 5/5

[xXsad angel of darknessXx]

awesome really moving

[yuna0789]

wow, e like really love it.

[Xx OMG Sugar Wafflez xX]

this is reallly moving and depressing but moving. good work! 5/5

[the real gifted brother]

you shouldnt have said "'he wanted to die'" you should have used a sadder form or a happier for like he wanted to join her or i wish i could join you

[Renas Takin You Home]

O_O
That was depressing D':
But I loved it o:
5/5 Nice Job Sakura! =w=
*Thumbs up*