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a black hole thats all it is bubbles floated out of it and you screamed asking for me to wake up calling my name praying this is jjust a game you shook me a thousand times over and you cryed knowing i was gone and not coming backyou cryed for the first time i was shocked that it was over me yet i couldn't breathe i was straped to the ground parallized in my place wanting to call out for help you asking the sky why me?
i see a black hole its sucking me in
i see a black hole the gate way to the end
i see a black hole its time for me to leave, so its time to say goodbye honey i'm sorry i must leave death is just a daybreak away i don't have much longer so its time to say what we haven't said like thoughs three words the most sweet yet deadly if this doesn't kill me that will baby. move on love some one like you loved me i don't want you wraped in my strings i want you to be free so honey don't just love me love them all have some dignity.
- by Temper-Mental247 |
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- | Submitted on 08/05/2009 |
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- Title: black hole
- Artist: Temper-Mental247
- Description: i dunno i might add more on.
- Date: 08/05/2009
- Tags: black hole
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- Red Dragon Knight 2010 - 08/07/2009
- hmm. its different. im not sure what to think. first of all, it would help to correct spelling and add punctuation. adding commas and periods in the right places can make all the difference. and second, im not sure the purpose of bubbles and strings. but that may just be me being stupid. either way, edit it a bit, and repost it. thats my suggestion anyway.
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- Temper-Mental247 - 08/06/2009
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nu one likes my my poem?
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