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Listen to me..
Listen to the words that I have to say. The words that I feel are, oh,so important. The words that can change the world.
Listen to my heart.
Listen close to the pounds in my chest as you get closer.
Listen to my stomach and the butterfly's that flutter inside.
If you listen close enough and care.
You'll hear the love I have for you.
- by RayneBloodyZombies |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 08/12/2009 |
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- Title: Listen to my Love
- Artist: RayneBloodyZombies
- Description: I wrote this little poem and thought it was cool! Its about a girl that has fallin in love with a friends and wants to know how he feels back.. Comment Please this is my first poem entry. ^^ Have Fun.
- Date: 08/12/2009
- Tags: love listen
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Comments (4 Comments)
- Trab barT - 08/15/2009
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nice, though i would place all sentences underneath each other, then you get:
Listen.....
Listen....
Listen...
The words are good (i also quite like the 'change the world' thing) but the presentation could be better. - Report As Spam
- Emokidisnowdiam0nds - 08/14/2009
- you suck
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- RayneBloodyZombies - 08/12/2009
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Ohh it tooke me a while to get that.. Now i get it Thanks for the advice ^^
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- Chemil-san - 08/12/2009
- wow, that one thouched me... but at the ending of the first change "the world" for "the way you think of me", or "your life" cuz there isn't something that rimes perfectly with world and gives that poem sence...
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