True love

• Artist: _J05E_
• Description: OOO read it line by line like a poem and its long but really worth it so read it all the way
  The way it happens in stories
  If u rate leave a comment i would like to hear ur opinion
• Date: 12/17/2009
• Tags: true love

In a night

With bearly any light

I see a girl

Shining like a pearl

She moves past

very fast

I couldnt help but ask

why are you so shy

an plzzz dont lie

just give it a try

ur much very quiet

nothing like a riot

she looke up

thinking i wasss nuts

in that moment our eyes meet

i was sweeped

ill trie to give her a kiss

but we all know i miss

and yet she insist

and gave me a twist

i grabed her by the arm

trying not to bring any harm

as my lips touch ur lips

it felt like an eclipse

an in a split second it was all gone

i heard my mother scream

soon it was just a dream

Comments

[FaithRavyn]

Hey, you commented on my poem some odd two years ago, and left saying to check out your writings. I really like this. I'm sorry it's taken me a while to reply.I love your free-verse and how you use rhyme to convey a message. Of course poetry isnt all about rhyming, but something about it triggers our minds and intrigues us, I'm always for rhyming, but of course its not always easy searching for not only a rhyming word, but for a word that actually fits with the

[_53xcy_]

nice job 5/5

[Panduh_fox_love]

aww thats cool!