Island Breeze

• Artist: xxxo_cookienapper
• Description:
• Date: 06/14/2010
• Tags: island breeze

Isn't it so beautiful, what you can see.
The light blueness of the ocean.
It's better then having a treasure chest with a key.
Feeling the cool ocean breeze on my skin.
As i walk along the beach.
This is the most happiest I've ever been.
Never wanting to leave, the calmness of the island breeze.



By, Sammmiibaby (SAMANTHA)

Comments

[treblecleffxoxo]

find a new word for ocean, repetition is important but so is a fountain and cornucopia of words. literally tantalizing a reader is more fun and interesting then using the same words over and over and over and over. have a rhythm that repeats, not a word.