I started reading a Left 4 Dead story and it seem promising because it was different. I’ve never read a story where a teenager and a baby tried to survive a zombie apocalypse world. It’s difficult enough that a teen has to take care of a baby by herself with no help, but it’s a hell lot worst when zombies are added to the mix. So of course, this story caught my attention and I wanted to see how it was possible that they are surviving. You know, having a baby around in a zombie world (they are never quiet) is like having a sensitive fire alarm that goes off even with just one speck of smoke.
So yeah, I started to read the story and I notice there are some details that were bugging me but I ignore it because they weren’t that major. But then alarms started going off my head once it reach a part that was unrealistic to me and I couldn’t ignore.
Such as the police paying for her and the baby to stay at a motel. And they also stopped at a store for her to get baby stuff which the police also paid for. Realistically that wouldn’t happen at all. Instead they would have called Social Services because it’s their job and they must do it because it’s the law. So Social Services would take the teen and her baby cousin into a temporarily foster home until godparents or whoever her parents/her baby cousin’s parents put on their will as their guardians if they were to die, would come and take them in.
Reading that part made it a bit difficult for me to get into it. But I gave it a second chance because it’s just the start of the story and it’s not like it plays a major role throughout the story. If the writer didn’t want to get into the whole Social Services thing, then what would have been believable is if they made one of the officers a family member…or someone familar to her family. They could have sign papers or whatnot to be her temporarily guardian until her real guardians come and get her and the baby. Having a police person in the story/being a team member would help explain how she and the baby have manage to make it far. Or if they die then it would explain where she was able to get a gun and stuff.
Then it reached a second thing that bother me in the story, big time. It was that the girl was able to still call and text her friend. Or other people being able to do the same and call/text people.
I can believe it and understand if the character was able to get a few messages and calls in the beginning of the zombie apocalypse because it was just starting. However, after a a day or two cell phones should NOT be still working once towns and cities become overrun by zombies.
For example: when 9/11 happen people had friends and family members in NY and they were all trying to call them to see if they were okay. But being that EVERYONE was calling all the cellphones services went down and no ones’ calls were getting through at all. The concept would be the same, it’s a zombie apocalypse…once people understood what was going on they would ALL be trying to call their love ones, only to get a dial tone and eventually it’ll go dead because no one is keeping the services up.
Being that throughout the story the main character keeps using her cell phone I stopped reading it any further. It’s just too unrealistic. No way that cell phones could be usable and let alone still working without needing to be recharge at some point and even then, that’s not possible without electricity.
When you think about it, if the main characters in Left 4 Dead had cell phones that worked…then majority of the stuff they went threw would be gone and what would be left is a very short and boring game. They could have just gotten a phone book and look for the CEDA/military number to call them and have them come and rescue them. Or at least tell them where to go that isn’t overrun. Or CEDA would have had an automatic emergency message that broadcasts important information for the survivors.
Meh, there was also a little something with an ipod. Like if her house burn down…how did she have that, along with other personal items when all she had with her was the baby and the baby stroller. And I doubt the police would spend money for her to get an ipod. If they did then how in the world did she recharge it without electricity.
Plus, the characters get bruise and rough up but never seriously hurt. They manage to get right back up without needing any first aid. Even more so when they face special infected…like a Tank. It’ll would feel more believable if there’s some injuries that need to be treated and are serious enough that need some time to heal.
In conclusion, I really had hoped that the story would be interesting and cool but the lack of realism and the lack of thought/planning, especially when it comes to details is what made it fail. It really did have potential to be a good story in the beginning but it just became overrun with …well. It just turned out to be one of those fantasy self-inserted 14 year old author with a bunch of readers/reviewers submitted OCs (Original Characters) kind of story. -_-‘
 DamnBlackHeart · Fri Nov 18, 2011 @ 06:17pm · 0 Comments |
