Wings

• Artist: Greendobbie13
• Description: This is a preview of a book that I am writting. Enjoy. The boy is a gryphon and the girl is just a human.
• Date: 12/22/2009
• Tags: wings story

“Please! Don’t leave!” She cried. I turned and spoke silently. “Why? Don’t you hate me?” “No…I don’t…but I’m lonely…I have no one else to be with except you.” I walked back to the girl and touched her cheek with my fuzzy hand. I smiled at her. “It’s a good thing you don’t know who I really am. It would be awful. “She smiled. “You’re so sweet. I mean…it’s like I know you from somewhere…like from a dream.” I pressed my beak against her and rubbed her cheek. She shivered. “Are you cold?” “Yeah… I’m just a little.” I stood and started taking off my sweater. “No…I’ll be fine. I don’t want you to freeze.” “I’m part bird. I won’t freeze.” I handed her the sweater. “Now jump on…I’m taking you home…back to your home.” She jumped on my back and gripped her hands against my neck. We took off into the silent night.

Comments

[Agrikar the Hidden]

No problem, and is it? razz It's the name/title of a character from my books. Thank you.

[Greendobbie13]

in the story, he never knew he was a gryphon until he was seventeen. (Bad parents told him late!) There are some types of gryphons that talk, but I probably should have added that he is half human, half gryphon at the time. *rereads...* yeah...you're right...probably didn't need him to say that, but the girl could be somewhat stupid and clumsy. Thanks for the tips, Agrikar the Hidden...thats a f***ing amazing name by the way.

[Agrikar the Hidden]

How exactly does the gryphon thing work into the story? Like, does he live in the forest or something? The writing itself is alright I suppose. But Gryphons don't usually talk, do they? especially when they have a beak and whatnot... mmm. But yes; the writing itself was fine I suppose, but I don't think you needed to have him say "I'm part bird" and whatnot.

[Greendobbie13]

yeah.......