ill take my time

• Artist: Lythiels scythe
• Description:
• Date: 10/24/2008
• Tags: take time

ill take my time
as i get lost in youre soul
dround in tears of my crimes
but knowing youll make me whole

ill take my time
as i build a new home
maybe when i shed my skin
ill find im not alone

ill take my time
as i open up my heart
and my sorrow will flow
towards my new start.

Comments

[To-Chi VIII]

Hm... Fair. Your grammar could use a lot of work, but your rythm, a common problem for amatuer "poets," seems to be fine, until the last line. It doesn't flow as well as the rest. Increase length and work on adding some more poetic devices.