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Take your time on posting the art. School's more important. *Is trying to change her attitude about school* >o<
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So I sat here and read the whole chapter.
And guess what?
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Yuki loves it. =D <3 It's easy to understand, it's fluffy stuff, and written very well. You know what made me chuckle? When Gaara spat on his hand. >o< Oh dude. That's so gross, I would never shake someone's hand like that. Imagining it makes me feel sick. >>; This story was just adorable! n.n With the little Hiniku, and little Gaara. You describe the things pretty well. <3
Critque?...Usually, I don't like to give critque, since I don't like it myself (But still, if you feel that you need to critque me, then do so. >o< I like help. I just...don't like being critqued. I like honesty.). But. I have noticed an error:
People everyone were having conversations with other, and at the village gates it was no different.
^ Well...You typed "people everyone". I think that's it...Maybe you meant to type "each other", but I'm not sure.
Otherwise, I didn't notice anything else. But it's a great story, and I'm glad that I got to read it. >w< Hee. heart Can't wait to read the others. o-o Well, I can. I'm just excited about reading more.
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o_o *Watches Gaara and Iia* >=D Oh yeah!