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Rass's Poetry, lyk wow =0
Uhm, well it's poetry, or my babbling. Depending on how I feel that day. It'll either be, babbling, random s**t, something I saw funny, my poetry, my ranting or pictures/avy art I've gotten. :3nod: Enjoy, lyk now.
Mmmmmnyah! More school stuffs.
STUPID RED CANCLE BUTTON GOT TO ME! gonk

What I posted...


Yeah I know that I said I was going to have a new poem and the update would include that (if anyone is actually paying attention to this thing) but it's not done just yet. School and stuff got in the way and I can't find my muse (stupid things liking to play hide and seek stare ). Hopefully though it will be done soon and as soon as it is I'll update this with it. 3nodding Until then you get to enjoy more poetry from my school days. My teacher liked this poem alot for some reason, he had to read it in front of the class. For some reason he believed I was the only student who pulled the assignment off. Yeah right Mr. Frank, yeah right. rolleyes

The assignment was to write a short poem conveying an emotion or feeling, describing it or creating a certain air (or feeling) in the reader and EVERY line had to have a color in it and none of the colors could be the same. Enjoy.
Oh yeah and don't be afraid to post and say my stuff sucks, you can do that too, I like having people say stuff sucks, then I know not everyone is coddling me. 3nodding (But please don't say it sucks if you don't mean it. Then you're just coddling my want to be told it sucks. sad )

Midnight
Magenta blood
Splattered on dry green moss
Golden eyes stare from the darkness
As white sound is all but lost
Pearl howls
Pierce the violet night sky
And blood red confessions
Make even the silver soul wish to die


PS:: Remember peoples! There's other poems, why don't you go ahead and read those and leave a little note? wink






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Aero Valentine
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commentCommented on: Sat Feb 26, 2005 @ 01:08pm
not bad, it's good and well written, and you used the colors well too. i like it. you have a real talent if you could write about feelings and use colors to describe them and describe them that well.

EDIT: oh, btw, you ******** rock xd


commentCommented on: Tue Mar 01, 2005 @ 05:52am
The poem kind of makes me think of a werewolf, maybe one who transfoprmed and killed someone they didn't want to. And now feel some kind of regret as to what they did.



Chimera_Doll
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teeny-pie-minion
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commentCommented on: Wed Mar 02, 2005 @ 01:10pm
I like it! It's a very cool poem.


commentCommented on: Wed Mar 02, 2005 @ 01:39pm
hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm i like smile



Wolfie116
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Gin Blossom
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commentCommented on: Wed Mar 02, 2005 @ 01:42pm
<center>Now, it doesn't suck.
Good use of language,
awesome flow of words.

I just think you could ease up on the color usage a bit.
It's kool to describe with color,
but sometimes it gets overused,
and I believe this would be one of those times.

Good write, keep it up. domokun


commentCommented on: Wed Mar 02, 2005 @ 02:51pm
That's ******** beautiful. heart



Omg Teh Colors
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Mooseclan
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commentCommented on: Wed Mar 23, 2005 @ 01:47pm
that one was my favorite, the third one you wrote was almost like a song good job i love the creativity wink


commentCommented on: Thu Mar 24, 2005 @ 04:31am
I love it!!! Wow! 3nodding I love dark poetry, that is, if you aren't trieing to write a dark one then, I love it!!! sweatdrop



Kitty-Kat1
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Asher is Le Spiffy One
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commentCommented on: Tue Mar 29, 2005 @ 03:31pm
It's about a werewolf?


commentCommented on: Wed Apr 27, 2005 @ 12:19pm
Kiro likes 3nodding The colors made it very vivid. Yet still with enought angsty to keep it going along with the rest of your poems whee heart
-Kiro-



[Taito]
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RedEveLit
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commentCommented on: Sun May 22, 2005 @ 04:42am
Well so far I have to say, that you are very good with words, and really I mean it. You can write a poem in so few words, but it will still be so incredibly deep. Amazing, your very lucky.


commentCommented on: Sun Jul 17, 2005 @ 11:28am
"Very powerful. I was touched. Love how you use colors to describe the mood and scenary. Also, it sounds as if a battle just went on, aa violent one at that. So violent that people hide from it in darkness. Also, there happiness lost, white. And that the reason for this battle was so shocking that people just wished it never happen. ^^ "

((Sorry if I'm using the lines from the poem in my comment but it helps, in my opinion, how I'm trying to describe what i mean to you.))



sakura159753
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kittierubi
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commentCommented on: Tue Jul 26, 2005 @ 02:06am
-Leaves a little note-

I love your poems. -Read two so far- whee heart


commentCommented on: Fri Sep 02, 2005 @ 01:28am
Deep.



Fleur Evette
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Fulaingt
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commentCommented on: Sat Jan 28, 2006 @ 03:30pm
Its short but it still tells a story.I can imagine that like a movie when i read it.Im amazed you got all the colours to work,its seems hard to do.


commentCommented on: Thu May 04, 2006 @ 07:25am
I liked it. It would be hard for me to write something to fit those requirements. I'd have to force myself to write something and then it would suck *laughs*



KyoSohmaRocks
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