*I am still working on this as you are reading. Feel free to comment in a PM or on my profile page where ev I dont care. But if you something really crappy to say about my story dont say it or if you cant keep it to yourself PM it to me so other ppl cant c it. But you dont have to be nice, tell me if it sucks or if you are nice tell me its good and of course it will not appeal to you becuz it is for kids. It takes too much brain work to put in great complicated schemes for the teenfolk to enjoy. I do that on a journal/writing site which I forgot the name of somehow....
Opening:
“Bye, have a great day!” A lady in a white apron, yelled to a brown-haired woman walking out the door with a White Scottish Terrier.
“Betty, take a lunch break. I got the next few customers.” A dark skinned man said as he walked out to the counter.
“Thanks John.” The lady in the white apron exclaimed as she patted him on the back. She slid her apron off, walking out the back door looking both ways before exiting down the steps. She entered a brown colored van. A Honda. She turned on the music.
“Da-da-doo-doo! AHHHHH!” She screeched in harmony with the song. She stopped at a red light. She then suddenly gasped. Her eyes began to mysteriously follow a Red Hummer H3 booming music, not noticing the green light and agitated honkers behind her urging her to go. Her mouth still agape, someone knocked on her window. She then blinked into reality.
“Ma’am…Ma’am…..MA’AM!” She then rolled down her window to notice a man in a blue shirt and a red plaid tie with yellow stripes paired with tan pants and Sperries. Very fashionable, the lady thought to herself, sarcastically.
“Ma’am, I hope you notice that you are holding up a lot of people with places to go.” The man said gesturing to a long line of never-ending cars.
“Yeah, I see that…now” the lady said under her breath. “And who are you to say?” she added looking the man up and down, with a daring look. “I’m a pet detective. Shermen Hones. Just call me Shermen.” He implied as he held out his hand. She ignored the handshake. “Well, nice knowing ya. I got somewhere to go.” She said as she showed a sly smirk on her face, looking in her rear view mirror with the red hummer still in sight…..
Continuation:
The lady made an illegal turn and sped down the road trying to catch up and follow the red hummer. Up ahead was a red light. Yes! She thought. I can finally follow more easily. Then she picked up her phone remembering she was on lunch break and called Domino’s ordering a large vegetable lover’s pizza with bread sticks. The greenlight blinked then the red hummer revved on with the lady following right behind. The hummer took a left turn. She took a left turn. As she followed she realized the hummer was taking a turn toward Vet Pet Care. She then jerked her car to a left turn early. He’s actually going to the Vet Pet Care. This is going better than I thought. Then she pulled into the back door. Wait! First make-up! The lady thought pulling out her makeup kit. She put on lipstick, mascara, blush, and powdered her nose and her mole by her nose. She then fluffed her hair then jumped out the car bursting out the back door. She heard a bell ding. She glanced up and saw it was a man in red plaid tie with yellow stripes and a blue coat with a Domino’s sign. The pizza man. Just in time! Then she ran around the counter grabbing the pizza pulling out a 20. “Keep the change.” The lady said smiling. Then she noticed the tie. Ugh, how many people are wearing those ugly ties? She thought. Then the pizza man walked off, double taking. Then she took the pizza and placed the pizza on the counter. Then John walked out the door from the staff only room.
POP QUIZ!
Who in this story has the lady seen with a red tie?
A. John
B. Shermen
C. A customer
D. A hobo on the street
Hint: Someone besides the pizza man.
“Oh hey! I know I smelled pizza. Do you want to ta-“then the door dinged and a tall great figured man walked through the door. He was wearing a gray Italian suit with a Great Dane on a leash in his hand. The Great Dane had beautiful, shiny, healthy coat. John had a trouble look.
“May I help you sir?” John trembled, tripping up to the counter.
“Uh, Yes. I need my Great Dane’s teeth checked and cleansed with the Platinum treatment.” “Uh….”
“I said I need my Great Dane’s teeth cl-“
“Yes sir I heard. Ju-Just hate to burst your bubble, b-but we don’t have a Platinum treatment. W-We just clean teeth for a very reasonable price.” John said tripping up on each sentence.
“Well, what do you have?” the man said raising his chin eyeing the lady’s vegetable lover’s pizza. The lady still sat there in mid-bite, staring at the man, who was staring at her pizza. Is that really him? She thought. And he’s not even married!?!? Gosh. She then decided to help John out. She got up and answered the man’s question.
“Well, we don’t have anything very luxurious since we are clearly just a quick corner Pet Care station for your pet’s tiniest needs that are very tedious for someone.” The lady said with her smile gleaming white as she pet the Great Dane’s head. “Don’t touch please…” the man said. The lady jerked her hand back. “Oh well, we just have a regular brush leaving your dog with a great fresh bubbly feeling that will leave him on cloud nine.” “Well, since I have nowhere to go since the 2009 H1-N1 virus is flooding around and none of my favorite famous vet places are open. I’ll- I meant my Great Dane here will just take your finest work. Oh and a piece of that delectable looking and smelling pizza there.” The lady reached for the box, but then John grabbed the pizza and practically threw the box at the man.
“You can take the whole b-box. An-Anything for t-the val-valued customer.” John said with a quick smile. “Thanks. Here” The man said handing the leash over to the lady and handing John a 100$ bill. “Hope this will cover everything.” “Sir, it doesn’t cost this much for a quick brush,” the lady said. “It’s okay.”
“Oh then I’ll just need your name Mr.....”
"Grovermen. Mr. Grovermen” Then the lady typed in some letters and hit enter. “Ok. Come back at 5:45pm. Bye.” Then Mr. Grovermen walked back to his red hummer…..
Continuation: “Ok. John since I’m the dentist here. I’ll take care of this. Then you can lock up once I’m done.” Then John obeyed her and walked up to the front door and changed the opening sign to say CLOSED. Then John walked to the staff only room. “I’m going to go relax with some wrestling.” He muttered with perspiration drenched on his forehead. Okay time to do some magic. She thought as she rubbed her hands together. She then inched her hand towards the Great Dane’s mouth. Her faced grimaced at the smell and the meaty treats stuck in his teeth. Apparently these famous vets have been closed for a long time. She then put on safety goggles. She grabbed a special drill-like tool. She took it and turned it on placing it on the rims of the Great Dane’s teeth with it’s mouth being held open by clips. She then finished, laying down the drill. She then took something from the dog’s teeth.
QUICK THOUGHT: Do you think the lady is doing something wrong or just doing her job?
It glimmered in the light. Jack Pot! She thought with a smile stretching across her face. She then tucked the item in her back pocket gently and then took a drilling brush and cleaned the dog’s teeth. The clock ticked. She was finally done with a satisfying sigh. Her arms sore. She then led the dog off the table. DING! She glanced up and saw Mr. Grovermen gliding across the room, practically floating. “Ok. Im here to pick up my dog.” The lady heard some giggling behind him. It’s probably just me. With all this excitement in me I wouldn’t be surprised. She thought.
POP QUIZ: What is the lady’s name?
A. Shermen
B. Great Dane
C. Betty
D. Bethany
Hint: Look in the opening.
Opening:
“Bye, have a great day!” A lady in a white apron, yelled to a brown-haired woman walking out the door with a White Scottish Terrier.
“Betty, take a lunch break. I got the next few customers.” A dark skinned man said as he walked out to the counter.
“Thanks John.” The lady in the white apron exclaimed as she patted him on the back. She slid her apron off, walking out the back door looking both ways before exiting down the steps. She entered a brown colored van. A Honda. She turned on the music.
“Da-da-doo-doo! AHHHHH!” She screeched in harmony with the song. She stopped at a red light. She then suddenly gasped. Her eyes began to mysteriously follow a Red Hummer H3 booming music, not noticing the green light and agitated honkers behind her urging her to go. Her mouth still agape, someone knocked on her window. She then blinked into reality.
“Ma’am…Ma’am…..MA’AM!” She then rolled down her window to notice a man in a blue shirt and a red plaid tie with yellow stripes paired with tan pants and Sperries. Very fashionable, the lady thought to herself, sarcastically.
“Ma’am, I hope you notice that you are holding up a lot of people with places to go.” The man said gesturing to a long line of never-ending cars.
“Yeah, I see that…now” the lady said under her breath. “And who are you to say?” she added looking the man up and down, with a daring look. “I’m a pet detective. Shermen Hones. Just call me Shermen.” He implied as he held out his hand. She ignored the handshake. “Well, nice knowing ya. I got somewhere to go.” She said as she showed a sly smirk on her face, looking in her rear view mirror with the red hummer still in sight…..
Continuation:
The lady made an illegal turn and sped down the road trying to catch up and follow the red hummer. Up ahead was a red light. Yes! She thought. I can finally follow more easily. Then she picked up her phone remembering she was on lunch break and called Domino’s ordering a large vegetable lover’s pizza with bread sticks. The greenlight blinked then the red hummer revved on with the lady following right behind. The hummer took a left turn. She took a left turn. As she followed she realized the hummer was taking a turn toward Vet Pet Care. She then jerked her car to a left turn early. He’s actually going to the Vet Pet Care. This is going better than I thought. Then she pulled into the back door. Wait! First make-up! The lady thought pulling out her makeup kit. She put on lipstick, mascara, blush, and powdered her nose and her mole by her nose. She then fluffed her hair then jumped out the car bursting out the back door. She heard a bell ding. She glanced up and saw it was a man in red plaid tie with yellow stripes and a blue coat with a Domino’s sign. The pizza man. Just in time! Then she ran around the counter grabbing the pizza pulling out a 20. “Keep the change.” The lady said smiling. Then she noticed the tie. Ugh, how many people are wearing those ugly ties? She thought. Then the pizza man walked off, double taking. Then she took the pizza and placed the pizza on the counter. Then John walked out the door from the staff only room.
POP QUIZ!
Who in this story has the lady seen with a red tie?
A. John
B. Shermen
C. A customer
D. A hobo on the street
Hint: Someone besides the pizza man.
“Oh hey! I know I smelled pizza. Do you want to ta-“then the door dinged and a tall great figured man walked through the door. He was wearing a gray Italian suit with a Great Dane on a leash in his hand. The Great Dane had beautiful, shiny, healthy coat. John had a trouble look.
“May I help you sir?” John trembled, tripping up to the counter.
“Uh, Yes. I need my Great Dane’s teeth checked and cleansed with the Platinum treatment.” “Uh….”
“I said I need my Great Dane’s teeth cl-“
“Yes sir I heard. Ju-Just hate to burst your bubble, b-but we don’t have a Platinum treatment. W-We just clean teeth for a very reasonable price.” John said tripping up on each sentence.
“Well, what do you have?” the man said raising his chin eyeing the lady’s vegetable lover’s pizza. The lady still sat there in mid-bite, staring at the man, who was staring at her pizza. Is that really him? She thought. And he’s not even married!?!? Gosh. She then decided to help John out. She got up and answered the man’s question.
“Well, we don’t have anything very luxurious since we are clearly just a quick corner Pet Care station for your pet’s tiniest needs that are very tedious for someone.” The lady said with her smile gleaming white as she pet the Great Dane’s head. “Don’t touch please…” the man said. The lady jerked her hand back. “Oh well, we just have a regular brush leaving your dog with a great fresh bubbly feeling that will leave him on cloud nine.” “Well, since I have nowhere to go since the 2009 H1-N1 virus is flooding around and none of my favorite famous vet places are open. I’ll- I meant my Great Dane here will just take your finest work. Oh and a piece of that delectable looking and smelling pizza there.” The lady reached for the box, but then John grabbed the pizza and practically threw the box at the man.
“You can take the whole b-box. An-Anything for t-the val-valued customer.” John said with a quick smile. “Thanks. Here” The man said handing the leash over to the lady and handing John a 100$ bill. “Hope this will cover everything.” “Sir, it doesn’t cost this much for a quick brush,” the lady said. “It’s okay.”
“Oh then I’ll just need your name Mr.....”
"Grovermen. Mr. Grovermen” Then the lady typed in some letters and hit enter. “Ok. Come back at 5:45pm. Bye.” Then Mr. Grovermen walked back to his red hummer…..
Continuation: “Ok. John since I’m the dentist here. I’ll take care of this. Then you can lock up once I’m done.” Then John obeyed her and walked up to the front door and changed the opening sign to say CLOSED. Then John walked to the staff only room. “I’m going to go relax with some wrestling.” He muttered with perspiration drenched on his forehead. Okay time to do some magic. She thought as she rubbed her hands together. She then inched her hand towards the Great Dane’s mouth. Her faced grimaced at the smell and the meaty treats stuck in his teeth. Apparently these famous vets have been closed for a long time. She then put on safety goggles. She grabbed a special drill-like tool. She took it and turned it on placing it on the rims of the Great Dane’s teeth with it’s mouth being held open by clips. She then finished, laying down the drill. She then took something from the dog’s teeth.
QUICK THOUGHT: Do you think the lady is doing something wrong or just doing her job?
It glimmered in the light. Jack Pot! She thought with a smile stretching across her face. She then tucked the item in her back pocket gently and then took a drilling brush and cleaned the dog’s teeth. The clock ticked. She was finally done with a satisfying sigh. Her arms sore. She then led the dog off the table. DING! She glanced up and saw Mr. Grovermen gliding across the room, practically floating. “Ok. Im here to pick up my dog.” The lady heard some giggling behind him. It’s probably just me. With all this excitement in me I wouldn’t be surprised. She thought.
POP QUIZ: What is the lady’s name?
A. Shermen
B. Great Dane
C. Betty
D. Bethany
Hint: Look in the opening.
