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Oh yeah, I'm a Princess I don't remember when I wrote this but I'm too lazy to change it. I like it mostly with the way it is, mostly because whenever I read it I get a smug feeling from it. You know, like it has a smug tone to it....You'll see what I mean when you read it, if I'm right and there's a smug tone to it. If not, I'm just smug myself. Either way, someone/thing is smug. xp Princess <center>People have called her Princess since the dawn of time People have called her Prisoner since the dawn of rhyme I have called her friend since the break of day Yet I've never had the courage to ask her to stay She is a wanderer She is a loner She is a coward She is a stoner She's a crier She's a weeper She's a hider She is a seeker She might have courage but she's not brave She'll stand and fight for only those who save My cold blue eyes stare at hers in the mirror She looks afraid but I hold no fear People have called me liar since my day of birth People have called me traitor and my name they curse They spat at my cradle and they'll spit at my grave Yet through all of that my soul is said "saved" I'm a seeker I'm a finder I'm a killer I'm a binder I am hollow I'm a cave Yet still in all that I am saved</center> PS: Remember people, there's other stuff to read too. Please read and review that too. sad heart

Posted by: Rass Sun Jan 16, 2005 @ 09:05am

[b:723929a83e]A First On TV

This is the twentieth century,
you are there, preparing to skin
a human being alive. Your part
will be to remain calm.[/color:723929a83e][/b:723929a83e]

-David Ignatow[/color:723929a83e][/align:723929a83e]

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Masta_chiefy
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Commented on: Sun Jan 16, 2005 @ 09:20am


	hey nice poetry i used to write poetry but i lost my motivation anyway its really good

Commented on: Sun Jan 16, 2005 @ 10:27am


	the twist when it says "i am hollow" gets the readers attention, because you use the "I'm" form instead. Very good job. Overall its great.

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Commented on: Mon Jan 17, 2005 @ 12:07am


	I like that It's interesting. Inspecting yourself from the third person, then switching to first...I look forward to more.

Commented on: Mon Jan 17, 2005 @ 12:28am


	kewl poem ^_^

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Commented on: Mon Jan 17, 2005 @ 10:39pm


	ooooOOO very nice 3nodding I do abit of poetry my self, though mine is all ways too repeditive...Yours does very nicely of avoiding that xd ,I'm gona sucbribe to your jouurnal and check out later posts you put up 3nodding

Commented on: Tue Jan 18, 2005 @ 07:31am


	Wow. Very nice, I suck at poetry razz

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Commented on: Tue Jan 18, 2005 @ 09:51pm


	Very nice.I did poetry a few years ago on a webbie surprised , got board with writeing it myself though xd . Maby you should consider submiting your art into the newspaper, or possibly some contests? I bet you could even get it published if you wanted biggrin .

Commented on: Tue Jan 18, 2005 @ 10:18pm


	Very well done! The rhyming was amazing. It was interesting and kept me reading all teh way through ^_^

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Commented on: Thu Jan 20, 2005 @ 10:39pm

Commented on: Fri Jan 21, 2005 @ 01:40pm


	That was an awsome poem, I wish I could write like that, it kept me interested till the very end.

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Commented on: Wed Apr 27, 2005 @ 11:54am


	I think this one or the mother one are my favorites. I love the way you talk at first as if you where explaining somone else, and then you switch and sow the true side of the poem when you start talking directly about yourself. Kiro likes whee heart -Kiro-

Commented on: Wed Jun 01, 2005 @ 06:19am


	...It's interesting how it switched halfway through, I really like that. It's not something you see that often. I love the theme for some reason.. just, going from third to first person and what was said.

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Commented on: Sat Jul 16, 2005 @ 01:44pm


	Just from the great rhyming of the poem gives it a.. comfortable feeling, comfortable and calm (smug, as you would say ^ ^). I always like reading poems written in first person, but what's even better are those that switch to first person. Also the timing of the switch was perfect, giving the poem a perfect structure. Although a couple words could've been changed to stay with the rhyming, it didn't affect the poem at all; it was very well written ^ ^

Commented on: Sun Jul 17, 2005 @ 11:51am


	"Marvelous. Interesting structure of your poem, going from thrid-person (Her) to first (I'm). Explaining how people see you then finally how you see yourself. I was touched and wished I have as much talent as you do. ^^ "